dogs

hey this is dogs, I really like your poem!!! i thought that it was great and it flows well, i understood it perfectly and i just liked it all around ...

hey scribbling dogs here. I really like your poem, but you need to make your theme stronger. you need a strong metaphor. also you need to make this longer. the ...

Youth is gone, that young happy boy, with his blue eyes gleaming, and his smile beaming. Innocents is shattered, that soft cool breeze, that peaceful wind that calming draft Pain ...

thanks for all your guys help, i will work on my poem, but what do you suggest other than the repetition of I am?? i despertly need more critics, i ...

[quote="dogs"]I am unsure what to call this. i am open to all suggestions Why did she go, she has left me. I was there when her beautiful dark brown eyes ...

hey dogs here I really liked this poem, even though i am not a big fan of love stories, i think this was still very good, the only line that ...

hey babanuuk, dogs here. first of all i really like your piece and your idea, but it dosn't really flow that well for example in the first line, why say ...

thankyou very much for your help adna however what would you suggest for something other than "when her warmth was replaced by a clammy cold

hey, this is dogs i really like your poem and i think that it has a great topic, however you rush into the hating scene too fast. you need to ...

I am unsure what to call this. i am open to all suggestions I was there when the light in her eyes started to fade. when the warmth was replaced ...

thanks for the help haily, however what would you suggest instead of "i am"?? TuckEr EllsworTh

thanks jas I will try to add a bit more discription in to my piece. and i will try to get that book.

hey dogs here I think that this is a great poem. i really like how it flows and i agree with everyone above me. however the last line kinda made ...

hey ashley dogs here I think that this is a great poem and it belongs exactly were you put it. I really enjoyed reading this. it flowed great and it ...

I am what I am, yet what I am no one knows or cares, I am forsaken by my friends like a memory lost, I am the self consumer of ...