dogs

This is very nice but like the post above it still is a bit of a work in progress. I do like the flow but its just a little choppy. ...

I like it. You were a critic for one of my pieces so i guessed i should return the favor. I totally feel you on your theme i get in ...

Well very nice and cute short story. I truly liked it but i think you should add a little bit more. just think what does the character want to achive ...

......... WHOA THATS A GOOD STARTING CHAPTER! Got me hooked on the first chapter and thats what i love in books. I am truely intreged by your FANTASTIC work here. ...

Very nice starter i can see lots of potential coming from this piece. However your last line when you say You could say that people who think this are crazy. ...

Wow great plot line i really enjoy it so far. But like the post above i did discover a couple mistakes. For example. like the post above try to focus ...

Well i enjoy your poem it sounds great. But a quick few suggestions. First of all... its too short, not that theres anything wrong with short poems but this could ...

Great writing i really like it i do! however.... some small things i would like to point out. Great plot line but you need to add some more variety and ...

Beecher, General, and some men come sprinting down a long hall way. The hall way was dark and had some engravings on the sides. A dead language that only the ...

Yea Yea a little darker than what i have been writing but hey its my apart of my novel please read. i would love some critics

As Soldiers start to load the helicopter to take off towards the third castle, Dr. Romanov confronts the General. “I’ll have to see this myself” the doctor said shortly. “Yes ...

LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL LOL OMFG U MAKE ME LAUGH!!!!!!! thanks 4 the comment but i have already written up 2 three chaps of this and i have been ...

A chopper was the only thing for miles in the wasteland. Hovering over a dead sea of dust with absolutely no water or food for miles. The chopper was heavily ...

A chopper was the only thing for miles in the wasteland. Hovering over a dead sea of dust with absolutely no water or food for miles. The chopper was heavily ...

@ This strange, odd, curious symbol. It’s a small whirlpool Whirling off into infinite A bottomless pit, Falling down in to nothing. Or a large coliseum, A lion’s mouth always ...