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Hi, I liked your story plot, but there are some things you might want to look over. Some of your spelling makes me think that I am doing one of ...

Hiya Sarah! Nice to meet you! I am Lucy Pennykettle, but you can call me lucy or luce. So, you write poetry and paranormal romance huh? Great! I love paranormal ...

Bugger! Everybody's beaten me to this! Hello Gale, my name is Lucy Pennykettle, but you can call me Lucy or Luce. Nice to know you like a lot of books. ...

Well, that was quite a read. Although, one thing you might want to fix is adding the last letter on words. For example: She peers out from the open window ...

Darn! Everybody's beaten me on the rules and stuff. Hi MySunshine. I guess you could say I'm the squirt talking to you. :P But I thought I'd say hi. Some ...

I agree, this doesn't really belong in action fiction. First thing I'd like to draw your attention to, punctuation. I know Sakura has said this, but you do need to ...

Most of the things needed to be changed were already said. But I can say that this story is not bad! You pace it very well and your descriptions are ...

I agree, you should keep on writing this. It's sounds really good. Bravo. :smt038 But, with good stories comes good edits, so, here we go. We had planned it, and ...

Hi huff puff and WELCOME! I know you'll enjoy it here! It's basically a writer's paradise! But to go along with anti-pop, don't chat speak. It's really annoying and hard ...

Two hooded figures were walking down a deserted street. One of them had an open flame sitting on his gloved hand. The other was holding a dark bundle. They saw ...

HI, I'm not normally this harsh, but you're gonna get a harsh critique from me! Sorry! Okay first of all, I want to take you to the beginning sentences; It ...

Hey members! My name is Lucy Pennykettle. I love writing and I really like this website! I hope some of you will get to know me! Best Wishes, Lucy Pennykettle

Jackson was finally out of the orphanage. He wasn’t free yet though. He could hear sirens screaming and heading towards the orphanage. He ran to the safety of a dark ...

Okay, I'm not the greatest at editing, but here goes! First of all, you do a lot of telling when you should be showing. I'm sure you've heard the saying: ...

Chapter 1 Jackson was like any other orphan. He had lost his parents when he was five and had been in the orphanage ever since. He hated it there; he ...