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Tis interesting, but maybe try and research names. The names you have for people in Japan, I first assumed Russia not Japan. You need to make that clearer early on. ...

Dave 5:55 pm Exiting the building he checked gun Keri had thrown to him, it had roughly eleven in the magazine in the barrel was one. So twelve altogether. Best ...

Lireal The ground shook, but Lireal stood fast keeping balance, her enemy (Valin) was unpretrubed. It was only when an inhuman screech and roar reached her ears, she risked a ...

Midnight Darkness #2 Promising... :).

I felt this had alot of potential this chapter, but it was too fast, and nothing was clearly established at the start I didn't realize he got out at a ...

WTF!!!!... Yeh that pretty well explains this part, I felt very confused, and here again who does he love his Nurse or the girl Toki. It appears to me he ...

Hmm, just can't find any reason to like Toki, this side of story seems terribly stereotypical I prefer Jake's parts. I like the teacher though, glad he knows his job. ...

I reckon BBB got most mistakes, I don't like Hiro much actaully I hate him misogynistic *beep*. Anyway I agree with Andy this part felt more compelling and I liked ...

I sadly agree with Andy, I was bored, I was honestly bored. Also I found something at the beginning that bothered me you told us a nickname would it be ...

Wow... that's so sweet... but horrible too, if only he'd known. Also music from Final Fantasy X. Just thought I'd mention the message in videos so true though. :(

FINALLY I'M DONE!!!! This is end of part 1, hope I've still got it, anyway enjoy. :) ****** Chapter 22 A kettle whistled shrilly. Here bony fingers lifted it and ...

Yep today my princess b'day everyone cheer :D. Happy brithday Elizabeth my beautiful amazing, gorgeous, beautiful, cute, sweet and wonderful fiancee. Let us be together soon :) *hugs* You're the ...

Anderson Figuring out the situation he quickly switched his forms, just in time for one stupid vampire to try and kill him. He growled with such anticipation before closing jaw ...

5:43pm Dave He felt like punching Jo once she left. There was only so far he could be pushed he had enough of this in prison and one person who ...

ICE campaign - "In Case of Emergency" We all carry our mobile phones with names & numbers stored in its memory but nobody, other than ourselves, knows which of these ...