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Alot of this seemed forced too much. I liked it how it ended but even poets don't use bad english like "eated" it's not a word. Also poems don't need ...

I liked this. I'll say right off I'm not a fan of vampire stories, but I like idea of going through vampire and vicar personaility. Am I right? If not ...

For offering critique for free. :) :D.

I'm not fan of vampire stories unless it's original. So if blurb was good I'd read it. What will cover be like. Chasing Rainbows.

Sounds like some murder story, I imagine it like something Christopher Pike would write and that's a compliment. I've no other story so again :P Chasing Rainbows.

Makes me thinking of Robinson Crueso. Although if blurb sounded intersting and cover was good I'd read it. Chasing Rainbows.

Okay I agree with everyone else. The realisticness is bad. You ever seen a Sergent Major they yell alot. Here's an example of where you fail with speech. Bad: Welcome ...

Great, I wouldn't mind one or two. I would like a critque for Chasing Rainbows Chapter 1 Revised And The Voyager: From Death to Life I'll appreiacte it. Thanks a ...

Because of chloroplast ... or Chlorphily... >.< Why do we keep asking why question and procrasinate on more important things? :P

I'll be honest, if this is serious it fails miserably. If not you still need more. Even comedy stories have substance. First thing you should do if spell check all ...

*Left the site*

LONDON (AFP) - Britons are losing their grip on reality, according to a poll out Monday which showed that nearly a quarter think Winston Churchill was a myth while the ...

Could I just say Kepe I think that friend of yours was probably most likely bi. Point being he was interested in women still. So really I agree that people ...

Dave Staring miserably around he couldn't stop thinking of Keri. The shock of it had passed but he was just so depressed. It was just so hard to believe she ...

^Knows genius of George Carlin :D.