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Well as my msn was hacked I changed my password here too. Thanks for warning though.

I liked this, I didn't understand it all from lack of description. Andy mostly caught everything. It's quite confusing and somethings never fully understood. Like it's not too cliche, but ...

This isn't very amazing. I disagree with Aedomir it's extremely cliche. I got bored of pronoucing name and they both weighed it down. You've got more telling than showing a ...

Guns don't kill people, people kill people. Now that totally rubbish. I've another phrase, "Guns don't kill people, no, people do. But I think that, you know, the Gun helps." ...

I'm for it. "An eye for an eye" I would prefer lethal injection. That philosphy is redicolous. Honestly early culture tried it and it was wrong and barbaric my fiancee ...

Okay lets begin, thanks for taking my advice to post it all in chapters. Sorry if I repeat others before. Now first passage. There was a series of events that ...

BBB I can't take all this info at once please post this in solid chapters! I want to help ya, but this is all just too much. You can't expect ...

I really enjoyed this chapter. I'm sorry but I can't see anything wrong. *double checks*. One thing you do try be a bit a wordy which may people a bit ...

Paul The Standium was fortified with barricades that resembled sea walls surrounding the it. The heliport was outside the enclosure. Even that was that had a barbwire fence surrounding it. ...

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Vernon and Elizabeth the original YWS couple. The true lovers. :D I love her so much :D. LAF and Ethan :P. I'm cruel and Nutty and Fayth that would work ...

We've no life, but if ya wish we can continue this in pm's. As reviewers seeing convo going on in thread annoys them. :) Keep it up! VSN.

You just edit post on here. Unless you've changed it lots. See like I posted Revised version of my chapter 1. Just edit it yeh. It's only if it's like ...

Very well written, sadly Sam beat me for any indepth critique. It's intersting but Volant avoiding swearing in a peice like this not a good idea. The school is terrible ...

This was pretty good but the same as everyone I've not one clue what period this is. You've alot of contridiction. If 17th Century, 18th or 19th. Elaborate. Even though ...