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LMAO you were so close Aedomir, but TN is home schooled so easier for her. Maybe next time :).

Paul Smirking at the girl staring he approached almost non-chalantly murming "last person who stared at me with such curiousity died." The girl did a double take, "Huh! Didn't hear ...

Yeh, I'm sorry about that. I shouldn't of, but they were annoying me. I was trying to stop them :/.

Just thought I would add to my opinion based onw hat others have contributed: When we kill someone for murder, or rape, it can often be an excuse for the ...

LONDON (AFP) - British industry magazine The Bookseller has announced this year's shortlist for the oddest book title of the year, with a typical mix of the quirky and eclectic. ...

The insane rules of an "eye for an eye" killings. We've tried it before and it didn't work. Two wrongs don't make a right. Revenge isn't something you want to ...

Quinn You forgot name Writer :P.

^ Known for not paying attention to explanations :P.

Kyte sadly this isn't enough to give us an idea :(. My suggestion is ya work some more description in, it has potential just start differently it's quite cheap. Not ...

To be honest with ya Ayra I see this more as a poem. I recommend you actually make it into a poem. You ever tried poetry if not, you should ...

So bland and no character development what so ever! Harsh I know but what it lacks in character development it has in cliches. I frankly have been given no reason ...

Chapter three, firstly I agree with Razor, pronouns are you're friend. Learn to use them :P. Now to nitty gritty: The canal was located just east of a factory. The ...

Right, now to begin part two. Major flaw is as Andy says the inconstincies with Yazra. Now you make critique with questions so thanks. Feedback questions 1) Does the boar ...

^ Doesn't know the avatar is nowhere type of porn (It supposed to symbolise how girls and boys look the same naked basically, Elizabeth one of me and her on ...

^ Known for being a little madam :P. (It's ya who won't see the truth not I ;) )