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Dance! with all your pent-up energy and laugh. Release! the pain that no one knows is there and smile. Rejoice! bathe in the sun’s rays and feel it’s warmth on ...

Sorry, but I totally agree with "God" (I hate that he used that name). It's a joke... jeeze... Anyway I sadly agree with him. It went on and on. You ...

Okay... I echo everyone else. This isn't a poem it isn't even original. The whole poem a big mess of gawking cliches. So what! I don't care he killed himself ...

Oh, no! Circumcision! My whole life revolves around this! Come on, circumcision isn't that big, scientifically speaking. It's basically the choice between HIV prevention and a "better sex life". And ...

Wow without realizing from seeing it on here. I did it. Oh well anymore. XD

This isn't a peom rather a list of ideas. Which you never even begin to use. Plus the constant repetition of 'the' that's horrible. Poetry has repetition, yes sometimes. But ...

Eddy Living the high life would never please him. Sure he was poor, living in a workhouse bruises on him from continual abuse. It was still impossible to shake the ...

My only problem is repetition of 'so full of life' get rid of that. It's too cliche actually. We understand the effect your trying to get. You do change tenses ...

Okay, I said I wasn't going to post this until later but now it seems I have to. Now you got the idea of the split well I'll explain basics. ...

when can we start? Very soon, just let me do the first post. And I'll post a DT once I've posted. God so many people. XD ---------------- Listening to: No ...

A couple questions... Is there a DT? If not, can you create one? What are the fantasy monsters that we can use? Sorry, but I had to ask. Thanks! -cat4prowl ...

I'm having problems figuring out where things should go, so if this is possibly in the wrong forum then i'm sorry! -penny The red wine is gone. Drunk. To the ...

Paul As he put on a face of absolute sadness, he explained to the leader. Slowly the man began to get a more worried expression when finally he'd finished the ...

Firstly, thanks so much for anyone who posted. If you can think of anyone else? I'd be so happy. Name- Edward Willard (Eddy) Speices- Human Age- 18 Hair Colour- Blond ...

No offence I hope but this poem is typical 'navelgazing' you involve the readers and you use no poetic techniques just telling us all these facts. The truth is, we've ...