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You ever heard of spell check? Really! Now come on we're not gonna do it for ya. This seems very steroetypical, the maid and the girl. You have no real ...

Not the best poem. My main problem is it so abstract you leave the reader scratching their head in confusion. You've a great poem but too many ideas in this ...

Rushing out like a man pocessed, he screamed with unearthly fury. The person tormenting the hybrid quickly scampered in terror. Once he was sure the guy had fled he walked ...

You lose the structure not to mention my intrest my forth stanza just goes on. Not to mention it's like whining. You just tell us continuelly. This is an angst, ...

well obviously some of yall aren't getting the whole picture here, Oprah is brainwashing people with all these lies and some of yall want to sit around and think its ...

Well even amazing writers mess up now and again. I'm sorry to say this happened for ya: Silence. All he ever heard. All he ever knew. And so, Silent He ...

Just let it become part of the story. Put it all in italics, don't force it, make the movement, melt into it. :) Hope this helps.

Glad to see I'm doing one good review today. The one problem is: so long ago, you know, and the glimmer's fallen from my eye. The rhyming here is only ...

The moon will always symbolize this (Not a exellent hooks sounds like most lovers or whatever comparing there significant other to some amazing object) Because it reminds me of you, ...

Same old, same old. Yes I said it. This poem so typical. You use nothing orginal it's all about 'me'. You tell us all, never showing, never letting us see, ...

I still can't believe there is any debate about the reality of evolution as a process in nature, but large groups of people continue to resist any form of scientific ...

You ignored the first point, so I will look at the second: Every scientific theory has something that can't compelety allow it to be proved. Like what? How will we ...

The YWS blog in unaccesible. Just found that right now. Glad that it's back XD. And Failed sending email :: PHP :: DEBUG MODE Line : 234 File : emailer.php

A lot of nice imagery but lost rather by some of annoying and stuttering rhyme. Whereas you have a wonderful idea making it full of rhyme makes it trite and ...

One way of looking at it. You keep the structure well throughout and don't bore with overdetail you keep the life and livliyness of poem with the dark and malevolent ...