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Yeh... great more angst ridding poetry. This is too cliche and broad a topic as nite says. You also use a very cliched theme and wording. The whole idea is ...

Sure, I'll catch up with these both I promise.

Sitting back he nodded towards the bar keep before speaking in a low menacing accent, "Not evry geezer 'ates 'ybrids. Yer quit the bleedin' lyin' and don't make me trouble! ...

If you wanted me to wonder why you posted this? ...You succeeded. If not, then all I can say is this. One, this is a typical of 'poor me' poetry. ...

God I still love this, if ya ever come back. Add in punctuation then it'll be perfect. I wish so wish I could star this maybe getting it bumped up ...

America—what's it mean to be you? I am struggling to keep up with a city that never sleeps, and I am falling behind the drifters and the homeless in their ...

it is incomplete but i will edit it as soon as i have more. [pre]INTRO When he turned he saw her. Face beaming. He could almost feel the pair of ...

From the title I was expecting a good poem. I won't lie, this has much potential if used. But you're main problem is you repeat I too much. It gets ...

Leja hit the nail on the head this poem gets much too trite and commericial. It appears to be some jaded Greeting Card with some cheap picture of a heart. ...

This was pretty good, but you're consistent use of personal pronoun makes this peice too slow paced. My advice is to practice and read dream sequences. It seems that's your ...

Oh, an added thing. I realized why this story was going nowhere, no objective. Well I have one now. A key individual most likely the Prime Minister a Hybrid hater ...

This should be intresting :P.

I'll volunteer Grif :).

Another bit of childhood lost for me :(....

Christianity in itself is perfect. The Christian community on the other hand, not so much. ;) Now that's a wide statement to make. Heck the religion isn't free of it's ...