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Won't him working nights get in the way of your "realtions"? It makes me wonder awfully, why ya bother posting if all you're gonna say is one sentence continuelly it's ...

Okay now to reveal who it is. The whole based on hope nothing else. You're right about it being a girl. In fact it's my fiancee. it's about how much ...

Oh come on and try. No body has ever guessed and since you commented back I'll give ya a bash.

O_O... Way too rambly. You start good but then go on and on. Feel like I'm Alice fallen down the rabbit hole. Please cut this down and make it less ...

Serj Tankian=Amazing. Now i agree with Suzanne here line 'Right' didn't add anything. It does seem to have a more lyrical quality to this. Won't lie it was a really ...

Hehe, no one can guess correctly. XD. Come on is it that hard to guess what it's about. Demeter: I had the lily bit like that originally, but changed it ...

Ami, is this poem about a singer who becomes famous it's what I got. You did very well on this. For once I have no problems lmao. Mad eh? Well ...

Tiff, this a too telling for my liking you a good not original, but sure ya can make it worth while read. My main problem with this is you've a ...

Very expressive, but what it about? That's all I don't get. It's all fine and well having such great imagery. But if meaning not clear it's void. The title inner ...

Ami, you've a wonderful poem, but seeing the other comments I agree you should show these places, it's a very selfless poem and if worked on, you could really make ...

Someone's sacred, Someone's crying, Someone's on the inside, dying Why put those glasses and make yourself a fool? Dropping your pride like a old greased stained shirt on the floor, ...

Wonders whatever happened to good old ol' Grammar 101. Punctuation I can ignore but directly ignoring capitals where needed. That's too far. This is simple english. Now to poem it's ...

Wow...wow..wowo... Yep that's my reaction in a nutshell this is amazing. The title never expected something like this. It's perfect, I found no problem wonderful imagery and brilliant word choice. ...

This is indeed cute but seems more like a summary for a kids story than a poem. It's a very child-like idea. But you do an awful of telling making ...

First I shall say: Show don't tell! Explain why you had to get away, make us feel it all. This isn't a poem as it lacks what a lot of ...