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Uh... yeh, I'm too confused and have a headache now, because this poem in all it's uniqueness, just goes past me. I try and see something, but I feel only ...

Agreed with Ami, this peice is very cliche ridden and just tells us, show not tell. Because if you show, you make use of the readers five senses, which washes ...

To be honest, I liked this. And I don't think the appearances are important in this case, I imagine Bree to be blond, a cheerleader, while Elthee probably someone who ...

Unfortunately, you've a very bland writing style it just doesn't do it for me. It was only the end I really got interested. It was a very big shock. What ...

Jig, it's an interesting idea, but you don't approach it that well. It bored me some bits, sadly. The use of music was orginal and I like how the villian ...

Hmm... this seems too vague and the use of big or strong words, only states 'look at me, look at me'. They don't fit the tone of the poem. You're ...

Carlos Finding a map hadn't been easy, but it seemed DSW was on the Twenty-first floor. The map had been designed badly and stupidly. It had taken him a near ...

Vernon, you're quite seriously defending this? This is an incident that happened thousands of miles away in a town you've never even heard of; tell me, how does this affect ...

Well, I'm sorry, all I meant was that if people get out of hand again. We may have the old supersitions and fears back. That's what scares me most. Really? ...

Well, I'm sorry, all I meant was that if people get out of hand again. We may have the old supersitions and fears back. That's what scares me most.

This is *blinks* Too Preachy! You just go on and on, I saw some potential to begin, but you just keep repeating. It is as living said 'been there, read ...

Your casual forgetfulness of grammar, seems kinda insulting. It's not hard, other than that. This poem isn't amazing, but it would do for Mother Day. It just seems kinda same ...

If you have to tell us what the poem about it means it's not strong enough to stand on it's own without the help. Maybe fix that, because if I ...

Wow, a very wonderful uniqueness in this. I thought this would be some cheerful poem, but you instead made it chilling even mortifying. This has so many undertones. I wish ...

Um... this is just too confusing for me. You switch people so much, I had no idea what was going on. Otherwise leading to a splitting headache and the feeling ...