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This is quite weak with the forced rhyming and not really giving us insight into the people. Sure they're fighting but I didn't feel anything it was all just words, ...

This is bad. Four months sounds about right. But 'evil', 'henious,' and 'outrageous?' Come on. I'm currently deployed to a country where the brutal dictator murdered 500,000 of his own ...

Awww..c'mon..don't you think you guys are being a little hard on Paolini? Everyone KNOWS he's not even near being as awesome a writer as Tolkien, or CS Lewis. But cut ...

Ami caught mostly everything but to reiterate. This poem isn't one that suits not having puntuaction not only does it look tidier having it in, it also makes it easier ...

No offence meant, but this bored me, the end was so anti-climatic and idea isn't even that original. Nothing wrong with using something unoriginal, but tell it in an original ...

If this is satire it's not really good. Not even that effective, the imagery is crude and barely fits the whole idea. The whole idea is unrelatable you give us ...

Look at this! Click here! It's another 'spoiler'. I mean, just look at him! Scroll down to the video, and watch it. It is so cheap, he really thinks he ...

Hmm, it died, ya could join in probably, I would like if this continued. What ya say Mark?

Russia has a low opinion of it. Not seen it myself, but if I see it somewhere I'll watch, just to watch it. More here

Sierra ran aimlessly, just wanting never to see and hear Alexzander. When she finally stopped running blind, she saw she had run to the bathhouse; a room about the ten ...

Erm you missed the point, they didn't take it by choice, they were eating school dinners and they didn't know it was laced with the drug. So yeh it's worse ...

Many a common problem in writing poetry, is telling us, rather than showing us, letting us see. It really doesn't have anything memorable, I hoped with a title like that ...

Oh well ya loss, because it detracts, posting in chapters, lets people go in review one chapter and wait for next one or go looking for next one if they ...

Fine, and I'll willingly do the other if posted in chapters :). Just hard to keep track of not getting anything when reviewing. If that made sense, please post in ...

Put it in chapters and I willingly will. Oh and it's not Christmas :p.