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Are You Bored? Try These Things:(This is from Act like a spy / secret agent for the day Act like you just met your friend for the first time Act ...

God it's not alot you see poems like this so good. This is one of the best poems i ever seen and I throughly agree with it. One thing ya ...

Great as per usual Emily. Well I didn't notice any major errors I'll look at it again. Yeh you keep mentioning he's so weak, but how is it he runs ...

Chapter Eight Tea was sat at a large mahogany table, the room it’s self was much too small for this table. It was a wonder none of the servants were ...

Chapter Seven “Well 'ere we are the Warf, right, home ter moi… and o'course the slavers.” Quinn announced with a flashy and exaggerated gesture his short blond hair outshining the ...

6/10 it's okay.

Don't we all have problem of getting a certain shade to explain an object or such. Well I'm putting some help down, but only the primary colours. Rest is up ...

This was good only problem was beginning was too long winded, it didn't drag me in. Try make a start that drags people in. Also sometime simple words work just ...

Videos of teachers or classmates being bullied should not be hosted by video sharing websites, the Education Secretary will say today. Alan Johnson will tell a teachers' conference that youngsters ...

I'm in, but please make it after exams. :D

One bit of advice I can think of is maybe to split it up into stanzas, so it's much easier to read. It's nice and full of compassion. Would prefer ...

Can a heart be more Than the shell that others see? Can a spirit transcend Its own mortality? Is a mind worth less Than the face it hides behind? Can ...

Again I say like with one before you concentrate on repetition too much. These poems if less repeative be good, just try a poem like less repetition and maybe more ...

This poem would of been good if it hadn't been so repeative. I had difficulty at finishing this, because of repeating of my heart non-stop. I wouldn't say scrap it ...

Chapter 6 Time passed Tea had rounded another corner getting frantic. The walls looked the same the corridors looked the same, nothing was diverse all the corridors were the same, ...