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Dave admired the house, "You've really done good, it makes me feel bad I can only promise you this sort of life by stealing!" "I'm sure you could with out ...

Dave eyed Derrick dangerously, he took the hint and didn't say anything more, she looked at him, "You're really going to make things more obvious..." Dave nodded then replied, "Yeh, ...

Again thoughts in italics please, it'll save all our brains XD. Anyway it's an obvious they're growing a close bond ;) lmao. Anyway nuth banter now on to next part.

I've said go over this with the link in chat, but ya're getting much better at this, a few punuaction and apostrophes missed. Anyway Elyn reminds me so much of ...

This is much better written now, just please write thoughts in italics, or you may kill my brain. Anyway I agree with Prok but, you can use the thing I ...

The beginning again was off-putting seems to be your forte XD. And this seems to be moving too fast, maybe you should of waited one more chapter before this. Anyway ...

This was pretty good, sorry it took so long for me to read this. Anyway seriously about the start just seems very off-putting and cliché. You should maybe try put ...

Dave told Derrick to go ahead, not caring taunts he'd get after. Keri came over, he walked over to her, "Why can't you leave me alone, we both chose that ...

This tool so helpful if ya any poor characters or some who grew up in the street, it's got cockney and a few others but I'm using cockney to good ...

Well just try keep ya mind on first idea, it'll help in the long run.

It's normal Night, here's a suggestion try combining these ideas into one story. And really you've that many ideas that's amazing :D honest. Anyway it's not pathetic having all these ...

I'm left handed XD.

Dave turned on his mp3 and waited for windows to start up, in a moment he'd heard the windows welcome tune, he pulled the mouse towards Internet Explorer Icon and ...

Dave wasn't going to admit it, but reason he always came back was Derrick was blind in one eye. The kid looked up to him and well he felt kinda ...

Christopher Pike an amazing writer, he keeps me reading, also I chose the best ones. Remember Me saga was brill and the twist in The Chainletter book 2 was so ...