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In my story prositution is actaully kinda forced because female slaves are put out on street and for marriage no idea. Though i'd feel pretty angry if said person continued ...

Dave's motive: 1.Protect Derrick and Keri 2.Find out XD, still no idea 3.Get out of Ashville.

Happy B'day Jenna i noticed this on myspace ages ago but forget as per usual, better late than never XD. *sings happy birthday*

Chapter 16 Jared glared at Raed, he’d still not forgiven the man for that humiliation. The smugness that Raed emitted was stifling. Everyone time Jared had tried to speak, but ...

Dave sat up, he kept hearing sounds of distress, they sounded like Keri, he switched on the tv and tried to sound out the screams of terror. It was Derrick ...

Hey Tempest welcome to YWS if ya've any questions or queries and they cannot be answered by FAQ then send me a pm or one of the mods or admins. ...

Just wondering is bows supposed to be brows if not then what is it? Anyway finally read it all heh. Anyway it's interesting and yes spaces between all dialogue. Well ...

As I said on chat bad way to begin it's too rushed to begin can't explain it. I'm enjoying it though and Shadow noticed the thing you should really fix ...

Yeh getting better now I noticed, few capitals and others everyone else has pointed out. This is getting good though.

Okay nit pick you say she too much and Elyn still too fluent. To add I agree with Shadow bout saying burst, is Tamia suddenly a balloon:P Okay on to ...

Adrian sighed and tried to listen to the discussion, but the man face and words kept flying back into focus, "But... you're a man of god!" A man of god, ...

I've only just began to read em. They're good very intresting and honestly took me a while to realize Max was a girl.

Dave rubbed his eyes tiredly, the tv showing some late show. He stood up groggily and switched it off. He'd fallen asleep, then again he couldn't even remember what he'd ...

Dave climbed into the van, he saw Keri climb in tears pouring from her eyes. he smiled weakly and kissed her forehead, she blinked a bit surprised then turned slightly ...

Chapter 15 Quinn felt her lover back, kissing him weakly, after a while Marius noticed, “Quinn, yer seem not all there.” She smiled and hugged him, “Yes… sorry about that, ...