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My opinion on swearing: Mark Twain once said, "When angry, count to four; when very angry, swear." Swearing has it place in society, and if we molly coddle people with ...

Oooh, from how it began I was skeptical, but this poem works perfectly so show a kids fear. It would be better if you made it a person, instead of ...

Beautiful, it's nice to see poetry can still be pretty when short. This has so much, and I like how it's so simple yet so much is said. Terribly amazing. ...

More like it Tim, much more like it. I really feel this poem, it's beautifully wonderful, though the meaning isn't all that clear it leaves you thinking and wondering. It's ...

I love this! It's amazingly written, you really capture the beauty in such a small thing. I was awe struck at wording and beauty you put into the world. You're ...

Tis, interesting for sure, just not enough worthwhile, you try to explain something but you never really get that message out. Expanding on this, would help greatly. Just work on ...

What I see here, is a series of ideas, never expanded upon, so look only like single sentences. The idea has some originality, just work on keeping us interested. This ...

I don't know what to think about this. The meaning of it just flew by me. Mind explaining for me what's it about. I can't say much more, it kinda ...

I may be bias since I love all stuff medieval. But this is brilliant. And it''s not a serious poem, but you're characterization is hilarious. It would work better as ...

... Poetry like this is best avoided as it cliche and just plain angst. You also navelgaze. First rule of poetry, tell us a story, tell us about yourself but ...

Oh god, not 'poor me' and 'angst' poetry. It's cliche and gives us no emotion. You drag on contrived idea, with great lack of originality. Then go on and ramble. ...

Not much to nit pick Yoha, my main problem is you lose the flow with such a word like 'condencending' rethink that line. Other that that. I get the poem, ...

Lets begin, now this poem, I felt nothing. It's all good and well to have wonderful imagery but I never felt anything from it. You tell us instead of showing. ...

Hmm, this is very cliche, with the whole dove thing and piercing arrows. Which greatly weakens this peice as an idea that had some potential into a mess of cliches. ...

Ha. Beat me too this one. No fair. IT'S ON! Jk. What can I say? Fantastic. Uh what? Anyway, this was interesting and you start off quite well but then ...