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Welcome back Adam I'm glad you came back. I've finally got a story now on chapter 19 now It's so great it's called Chasing Rainbows.

11:00 am Dave Dave drove on in silence ignoring Derrick protestation, until the guy stopped and all through the journey silence a few times he caught Keri eyes, she seemed ...

Well firstly this here. She was all that mattered. How could she do this to us? How could she do this to me? Doesn't she know the stress she's putting ...

Personally the BBC adaption was much better. Everything about it except small things. Though BBC did an amazing job. My favourite The Dawn Treader.

Chapter 18 Eolen finally spoke in the deafening quiet, “Your days are numbered Jared, if you harm Tea anymore you may regret it later!” Jared smirked staring at the ceiling ...

Hey Fire it's in About the Author. Mods delete this.

Adrian sighed, Becky was right, then again what was truly right in the end? Valin was the king of the elves yet he had no whim about killing. Though Becky ...

10:45 am Dave Well he couldn't concentrate sure, it was no problem, the door crashed open and in walk-well not walked more liked staggered, the owner came over shaking his ...

10:00 am. Dave Dave woke up remembering just in time Keri head was on his bare chest. He lightly pushed her brown hair out away from her ears and kissed ...

Here's a suggestion it's good but conversation a bit repeative. I suggest getting rid of some or just changing some of them into to other sayism. You'll soon find these ...

This kept me reading and as I said in chat the description is amazing, everyone else pointed out grammar issues. You've got great skill Luc don't think everyone a liar ...

It's said by someone that "When you kill a character you're killing part of yourself." So try think of each character as maybe a part of you.

Chapter 17 Quinn smiled as the man she’d been stalking walked past totally oblivious too her existent. He was a well-primed individual with a definite air about him. He seemed ...

My favourite book has to be Montmorency - Eleanor Updale and I'm working on my story chapter 17 Chasing Rainbows.

This guy is my argument, because no matter what way you look at it, the taking action weighs down the not taking action.