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The word I chose is: Alive Go check out the contest !! It's a really fun one :D ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Gradually slipping into consciousn

Though a tad too short it is really touching, and displays the emotion in a clear way. Try to read through it a few times, and maybe say sentences out ...

HAHA !! take a photo of your garden :wink: I know, boredom is a dangerous thing, isnt it? Be careful with your spelling, make sure you take the time to ...

That was pretty funny :D Sarcasm rules ! The other repliers have basically covered all real critisism, so there's nothing for me to do except say that I like it ...

I dont think you have to be disturbed to write from the point of view of a disturbed person, or to write disturbed events. If you would have to be ...

I'm sure everyone experiences pain sometime in their life so it should be possible to imagine. Although of course there is good chance you haven't gone through pain that matches ...

As long as you don't go off and use half the song as dialogue I think it's fine :D If you simply use it as inspiration, or base it on ...

My influences... Well :D -Alecia Moore (Pink)'s music -Evanescence -Kathy Reichs -Patricia Cornwell -Jodi Piccoult (WISH I COULD WRITE LIKE HER!!) -My friends :D love those weirdos :D -Life in ...

I'm a writer because ..... I love to write ? :D Ever since I was a kid I'd get into moods where all I wanted to do was sit alone ...

This short story is meant to be from the point of view of a young girl, around six years old, although the vocabulary isn't as juvenile. ---------------------------------------------------------------

This is a nice prologue :D I like the way you describe the man, with the adam's apple, and how he didn't fight back. It's some good descriptive writing! The ...

I agree with the two repliers before me about the coldness of Megan. Have a flashback, for example, of her and her boyfriend before the life-changing diagnosis. She's human, and ...

Hey :D Yea I decided it would be better off being here, in the normal forums long stories seem to put people off :? It is a lot to critique ...

The MC of The Darkness Within is fifteen-year old Jess Parker, a troubled girl who runs away from home after life deals her some bad cards. She starts a search ...

Some things simply get clichéd the heck out of, like this_is_history said: why do things always have to be called unoriginal because of such a small thing, like a species ...