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Heya, As promised, here's the review :D I really liked the story, especially because of the description and the way in which weaver suddenly becomes a crocodile monster thing. The ...

Hey Dono I enjoyed reading the story, it is a really interesting concept, having Hunter change like that. The descriptions of the friends are also good, and I can really ...

Thank you for your comments !! I'm glad you liked the story :D And yea, he definetly deserved to get punched :wink: I'll tone the description down a notch when ...

Thank you ! You've made some excellent points. *slaps forehead in a how-could-i-miss-that way* . I'll get editing :wink: XxxDo

Oh my God Suzanne, yet another piece of incredible work! It's really nice, and I love it. Really, try to get it published someday, for it is definetly of good ...

The joyful tune drifted through the car, and I shifted uncomfortably in my seat, not feeling the happiness the song was meant to set off. Leaning my head against the ...

Hey there :D I'll critique for a critique XD Haha The story I want critiqued is called The Ultimatum, in Adventure/Action. Forgot how to link :oops: Anyway, is there anything ...

Hey there Second piece of your work I review in one day XD I enjoyed reading it! It was well-written, and apart from some mistakes there wasn't too much I ...

Hey there, Welcome to YWS ! I enjoyed reading your work, it's pretty good! At some points it gets confusing, but I'm sure you can solve this by using more ...

Wow. This is a really strong piece! There's one thing that confused me though. In the beginning you say "best friend" and later on "sister." so it gets confusing. I ...

Hey ! I enjoyed reading this, I really like it. It's clouded by mystery and questions, which makes it compelling to read. Post more of this story sometime, I'm curious ...

Heya It would be cool if you could take a look at one of my stories. I don't know how to link... I forgot :oops: so I'll just say the ...

Hey there :D I really enjoyed reading what I've read so far! It is really good, and an interesting concept! Alicia needs to be developed more, and she needs to ...

Hey there! I enjoyed the concept you were working with, and think this is an excellent story to make into something longer! It has the potential to become a more ...

Thank you ! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story :D It's always great to hear people say that! I've changed to using the proper dialogue marks in my later ...