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This is really good. I like anyway. It seems a bit hard on the flow in some places, and a bit choppy in flow. Of course I love the subject. ...

My Blue Crayon committed suicide An ocean away from loneliness, I share in the plight of failure, I use my blue crayon to speak of solitude. Choose your crayon, make ...

I disagree with ican, somewhat. There is a lot more salvageable than that. But there is some of that other stuff he was talking about, too much modification of the ...

I do not think this will be anything like the cold war. China should act swift and precise, while NK is still only testing. They have a lot to lose ...

Do you have a favorite crayon? Tell me about it. I posted this as a writing activity. You can even use the color blue and try to do me one ...

HEY! You just copied and pasted your last critique of my stuff. Is there such a thing as to plagiarize yourself?

My Blue Crayon committed suicide An ocean away from lonliness, I share in the plight of failure; I use my blue crayon to speak of solitude.

This piece IS really really good, except.... "those who can do the splits" -can there be another description here? Then, can you omit the following? Dead, under some fallen leaves. ...

I totally agree with Skye, Bob. From here on out, I am going to read each of your critiques in whispers against the backdrop of Louie Armstrong. I love you ...

I know, its the weirdest thing, eh? Bradley must be a popular name for the ever so useful tissue.

I once wrote a limerick about tissues.... Let me see if I can remember, I think it went a little like this: I once had a thought that weren't pure, ...

fishkin, (can we make words up? This IS the word that came to my head) If not, just plain old FISH.

HEY! You cant just rub it in that you know something we dont. SHARE THE WEALTH! How'd ya do it?

I kindaza get it. Let me know: When friendship is strained, for whatever reason, it is sometimes near impossible for each person to recognized what the other is thinking, or ...

I thought it was.