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teeheehee, thats not how you spell colors. *silly australian* Anyway, I liked, and was a bit confused by paragraph 2 also. I think wiggy suggestion would help but also you ...

Is this the beginning of something great? Or the end of something spectacular? My dictionary says the word is acrostic. May I challenge you? add IS DEATH. Yes or no, ...

I like the lump... I like the backround... I like the 'bleeding eye'. what totally freaks me out though? that F**KING hand!! What the hell is up with that freaky ...

OK. Lets all remember what we are talking about here. Patriotism, and the results from lack of such. From reading almost everyones critiques on other posts, grammer, flow, rhythym, and ...

DAMN! I think that was my little sister. Is anyone surprised?

ummm.... um. Attempt at romance? kindaza. sounds. romantic like-ish, sorta- maybe. I think "blend" is totally the wrong word to finish this off with. Try one of the following: me'nage ...

Addie- The word FALSE. the sentence; Nasty things they are, those teachers. And with the boys, words like supposed, few will get words like that right when pronouncing them. it ...

Slick Jimmy is SUCH a tool. -Slick Jimmy He's one of the crowd and speaks up aloud of things he may not understand. He's a tool of sorts but just ...

hyper-carotenimia -or- jaundice pick your favorite and run with it.

Oh yeah, this poem is tight. Feel free to inflate your head and hope it does not exhaust on the next piece that may be crappy. ;-)

(Do I have a void?) Ok, was this the final line of the poem? Or are trying to ask us to figure out what purpose your poetry fulfills in your ...

this piece is very very interesting, nice concept. But it confused me alot, and I dont think is is merely because Im a little bit thick in the head. I ...

That is totally better, groovin'. Now work on puctuation. My only thought is a period after Retirement's gates. But there could be more. First place next independence day.

Hey Snoink, This is pretty cool. In episode 5 of The Adventures of PuppetBoy, there is a scene somewhat similar to this one. I love your abilty to visualize the ...

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