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Since this is a bit long for my attention span, I will say the first three paragraphs were really good. But no critique since I didnt finish. But I will ...

Mesh> Are you talking about my first post or second? My first post I said I think it was the words that made me read faster. Second posts was telling ...

Hello beauties. I thought it was time for me to chime in. I havent the attention span for long writing, which is why I never get ANY help from bob. ...

leaves may fall the same time each year; petals droop and die, snow drifts, day concedes to night concedes to your eyes meeting mine like magnets. yet, this year: time ...

Read a poem aloud and people and all will connect to its underlying psychological principles in exactly the same way; they will appreciate the form and structure, rhythm and rhyme ...

*slick jimmy slaps the softside of elbow, and rocks to and fro* Dude. these words are..... Hey wait a minute, aren't most opiates yellowish in color? hehe, you said tit. ...

Your right, I do have to move away from the self loathing phase I am in. I am so stupid. I should have never posted this. It is crap. I ...

The Whore -Slick Jimmy My body is riddled with reminders of your kisses. memories of the depths of your unknown passion. Replacing my love with a desire to hate. I ...

Hey Lexy. I opened this in antipation that it was about the member of the month MYTH. We all love Myth, yaay. But then I read what you wrote and ...

I like it and think if we reword what Ican said, perhaps you could take it out of the narative, and restructure it, you may have something.

An empiricist, and the romantics, even Keats in his early days, would say people less informed have a more honest and fundamental connection - same goes for a brand of ...

day concedes to night concedes to day, This line sounds familiar. Do you realise that I started to read faster on the second verse? I think it was the words. ...

Can we posts here? If so, I want ask if I am number 4. If so, this is a pretty vague category for me to fit in. Can you make ...

I am truly awesome here at YWS, and it is truly awesome to meet. You are a youngin' so I will not invite you to read ALL my stuff, but ...

but he has better dental work than I, and I am jealous.