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I loved reading this and it was so sad. Here is just a few thoughts I had: The ground outside was steaming from the heat of the hanging sun. The ...

I love the name idea, it is very original and interesting. Like Dreamer I wonder how Nameless will get on and if there is another one who is nameless. Anyway, ...

This is so much better. I like how you put the bit about the window at the start rather than near the end and putting that bit in about her ...

Ok, I have added a bit more to it, there is a story behind how she got her name and why she is living with her aunt and uncle, but ...

Is it true that you Americans pronounce it Al-oom-in-um? When I hear people say Al-oom-in-um it makes me laugh, it really doesn't sound right to me.

I think I know this one, I have heard it before. [spoiler]Is it a coffin?[/spoiler]

Ok that is an interesting start, but at the moment I don't know enough about Sara to care enough about her to want to keep reading. When people heard her ...

Pathenol Ethyl Ester McKay It was all new to her. She walked down the empty hall, lagging behind the teacher as she looked around. There was a shelf the length ...

I like to write listening to music through headphones so it blocks out everything else. Also I have to make sure my little bro isn't anywhere near me or he ...

Well I was ten when she died too. I did know of her before she died, I remember her hugging a girl who had AIDS in a suoermarket or somewhere, ...

Ok, that was, well...interesting. It was nicely written, but, I didn't like it. I don't mean to offend you or anything, but it is just too wierd for me. I'm ...

Well I can't help you much with the title issue (I am really bad at titles myself) but I really enjoyed reading this, its awesome. I had never come across ...

Thanks heaps. :) I know I have an issue with changing tenses, but never usually catch all of the mistakes, so thanks for pointing them out.

I love it, it is soo sweet. I don't really have anything constructive to say, but I love it how there were all these strands running thru the story - ...

I work part time at the Supermarket. I'm a Deli Chick (well you know, it goes with my name :)) or Delicatessan Assistant if you want my real title. I ...