deirdredawne

Well to start i quite enjoyed the dream time. Some little nit picks: "For a moment, her posture seemed absurd." - why was it absurd? “I can’t count them all, ...

Could I lie and say I love you? Could I lie and say I want you? Could I live when these lies arent returned? Would you lie to me? Through ...

To start, this was quite an interesting read and out of my norm. Now onto some editing. First off, I was quite confused with the location. I think you should ...

Very festive, to begin with. I could see this moving into a longer story, the base is here. There were some minor grammatical and spelling errors, (The exclamation marks at ...

Gone, with the wind blowing at my back. Gone, Like the heart you once held. Gone, driving along the freeway in a beat up mustang convertable. Gone, Like the love ...

I agree with the above. In the beginning I was intrigued and quite interested, imagining Marmee Noir from the Anita Blake novels in this 'narrator'. But it became repetitive and ...

I enjoyed this and agree with teh above comments. The paragraphs make reading quite choppy. I would have enjoyed a bit more description earlier on. Get me into the mood ...

I agree. I read twilight and the rest of the series when they first came out. dating me as this was over 5 years ago now. Then I thought it ...

I would never call myself a poet or an officianado (sp?) but I enjoyed this. Emotion clearly read and felt through your words, i enjoyed the subtle rhyming and the ...

I agree with Drawers absolutely. It is so hard to nitpick when the overal impression is of competence and yes, an author . That was exactly what I thought when ...

I enjoyed this. and agree with most of the reviewers. From what I have read you have left it open to go into as many different directions as you want. ...

Nobody pays attention the middle of a story anymore. You get hooked on the beginning, and the ending is what you will re-read the book for, what most people flip ...