deavarna_satina

I'm a massive Twilight fan and I have to defend you. Your story is very different to Twilight. The fact that there are vampires and werewolves doesn't automatically make it ...

I am in love with this story. I actually like it better than your other one (quite a feat!). The badass vampire. It's good and a more refreshing take on ...

I felt that the way Diana and Charlie were able to talk about the love between Charlie and Nicholas so easliy a little... strange. Personally, I would find it a ...

Aw love how decent Nicholas is about his mind-reading. Such a gentleman. Your characters are certainly developing and I see that you have mentioned how fast their relationship is moving. ...

LOVE the microwave dinners **chuckles to self**. Interesting idea there. I guess if everyone else in society enjoys these quick and easy fixes, why not vampires, too? I am VERY ...

Wow, I really am hooked dear :-) I wasn't going to comment again until the end, but I just wanted to note that I think that Nicholas and Charlie's 'friendship' ...

I disagree with Aedomir. I think think that you should be able to give your vampires any qualities that you like. Folklore aren't rules and I find that many vampire ...

OverEasy has done the nitpicking here, so I wont bore you with revisiting. I like your idea here. And you have used some good descriptions. A vampire romance *sigh*. I'm ...

First of all I would like to say that you have caught my attention. This is an interesting idea that you have here and I would love to read more! ...

Thanks for your comments guys. I really appreciate it. I ended up getting a B+ :-)

Thanks to everyone who has read this far. There is only one more installment to go after this (I think!). I really appreciate your comments and critiques :-)

He looked so small and out of place. The confident and care-free air was gone, replaced by someone who was young, helpless. He looked like a frightened child. Evelyn wanted ...

It's an interesting idea and I would like to see you develop it more. I find writing about animals can be a little dodgy and I agree with Azila when ...

You have an interesting plot here. Your use of words were good, though a few punctuation errors. I am rather intrigued by this box you speak of and the story ...

These are some powerful lyrics. I don't normally haunt the lyrics catagory, but these really struck a chord. It would be awsome to put them to music! And being hearing ...