deavarna_satina

Well, I must say, I'm a little intimidated to crit your work. How on earth did you come across this kind of talent at the age of 13? I'm impressed. ...

Okay, finally got around to writing my review. Gotta love the year 12 work load... Well, on to the nit-picking! I feel bad about skipping out on so much but ...

Okay I have saved my comments for the last chapter posted because I simply couldn't demonstrate enough self-restraint to stop from going straight to the next one! I'm absolutely hooked. ...

Aw, thanks so much! I'm glad you you enjoyed it :)

Ooh, brilliant! I liked this a lot. It captivated me from the very beginning with your talk of gold dust. It befuddled me a little, but was a good opening. ...

Hello! Long time no read! Though that one's my fault... **tugs collar awkwardly** But now I'm back and ready to critique you! Okay, I like your portrayal of Trey's nerves ...

** Dear Reader, Excuse this first installment, it still needs tweaking. I'm very interested in your thoughts, especially on whether you think I have rushed into the story too quickly. ...

Hey! I'm back! Thought I'd start off by reading your latest. Very nice. Some really good description. Bit of nit-picking... Her trained eyes could barely make out the shape of ...

Wow... You actually had me in tears! I feel like such a sap... No, hang on, I'm not the only one you've had crying. Must just be your superb writing ...

Thanks for pointing those out. I've always used single quotation marks as I find it doesn't matter, so long as you're consistent. And the bit where she is speaking incoherantly ...

Thanks for reading everyone. I'm glad I've finished this story. I'd love to hear your feedback as I'm still a little unsure as to whether some parts worked or not

I'm hooked. From the very first line you had my interest. I like the idea of the text message. Something so silly, generally to be ignored by recipients. It's a ...

Ooch, chills. I liked this. Good imagery, short and sweet, overall enjoyable. Well, enjoyable doesn't sound like the right word to use here... how about touching? My only problem with ...

‘I don’t want you going to school today.’ Evelyn opened a bleary eye, wishing her mother had waited a few more minutes to make this announcement. It had been far ...

Beautiful. Simply beautiful. You convey Lukas's feelings with skill and I definately felt his pain and fury. To have something like that happen when he had just decided to give ...