daydreamer9

This is a great piece. I love the topic. It's slightly over-used in general, but I think you've got a good start. Here are my critiques: First of all, try ...

This piece is really good and it has a lot of potential. I only have a few critiques. I look at myself from the world’s perspective and feel so ashamed ...

This is a very touching piece. I like how you used a subject for conventional for the foundation of your poem. It's very simple and can relate to many. I ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS. :) I'm sure you'll make many additional friends. People are all really kind here. If you ever need any help or want me to look over ...

I have to go to Tamburitza. Damn.

This piece perfectly depicts the confusion attached to love. All in all, I thouroghly enjoyed the piece, but I do have some critiques. You are sitting next to that person ...

Actually, I did not. I anticipated being disappointed and therefore decided not to waste my time. TPBM secretly harbors a desire to dance when no ones looking. . . .

General Note: Big paragraphs tend to dissuade readers. Try shortening them. First of all, remember that with each quote, you should start a new paragraph. There are many instances in ...

Hey Meg! Welcome to Young Writers Society. :] I'm sure that soon you'll feel at home here. The people are very kind and are very helpful when it comes to ...

This story stangely touched me. I cannot truly review it, even though I believe there are some grammatical errors. Incredible work. My only suggestion is to try simplify some of ...

I'd rather tell my story out loud than have to write it down. :] its so much easier for me to talk about it!

Penelope. love the intonation!

Thoughtful, independent, a dreamer perhaps? Brown hair, blue eyes some what optimistic.

Wow. This is a very touching piece. I was amazed by the meaning and the percpective. I do have some critiques though. Her alarm screeches, 6:00 A.M., but she is ...

The intonation was marvelous. I'm not quite one to critique poetry . . . or maybe I'm just blinded by the deeper meaning in "Bright Lights". :] It did in ...