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Man - that was a great title - i wanted to read it :(

Muted sighs passing from the lips across the way As I call my lover, the morning of today. Her phone is off as she sleeps through the suns gold rays. ...

This poem is wow, just wow in every sense of the word. It's sad and remorseful and beautiful, and dark - this is everything a long poem should be. It's ...

It sounded more like a rap or a freestyle than a poem, but you have it in the poetry section, I'm going to critique it as a poem. The Good ...

Hey Chic, This was a good lil' poem lot of power in just a little bit, and i thin you picked a topic that most people can relate to. - ...

Your poem is different, i will never say that art is wrong, but this is really different - i would like to know the backstory to this one, it lacks ...

I Like your poem - im kind of a romantic so this one stuck out. I really like how you focus on just you two people, even though your in ...

You left me four months ago I was broken and you shattered me You told me you loved me so, Here you are in my memory What do you want? ...

What an interesting poem - its good. few things i noticed 1. You had a really good iambic trimeter going until you got to "Swallowing kin and stars" im not ...

Actually - i talked to my friend, and he told me i wasn't writing enough lol - i didn't realize i was supposed to critique other ppls poems - so ...

This is a beautiful poem. i really like the imagery, its twilight, dark gloomy-ish, one of my favorite things - and def. the most unique element in this poem (in ...

I like these you use a lot of liquid sounds and i love that in Haiku, makes them flit right off the tongue. my favorite is the 2nd one, i ...

I gotta agree with the last person, The subject is overdone, i think its a bittersweet way to write. On one had there is a lot to be sad about ...

What beautiful eyes watching the words, We type to and fro beneath the distant Georgia skies. Her heart is there for me to see And all she asks is all ...

This is a beautiful piece. I like your use of alliteration, that really got my attention. I like the progression of your poem, like how its so bleak & depressed ...