darthmaul1001

OK thanks for the help Guys (:

Glistening eyes and bemused glances, Are small clues toward my hidden secret. You had your fair shake, but missed the threshold, To memories that could have been. Every trace of ...

OK so i really liked this, it had a really good rhythm when u read it. i also really liked they way its kinda of listing yet you have to ...

Thanks you guys this helped alot lol i wrote this at two in the morning so i wasnt expecting it to be perfect. ill work on it some more then ...

OOhh if you wouldnt mind could you go under Lyrical Peotry and read my newest post called The Eyes of an Angel? i f you could i would be verry ...

lol me too im mostly happ that u decided to help tho its greatly appreiated (:

As I stare into your eyes, the color of the open sea. I'm lost now in your world, AS you slowly drag me in ... You are the master, And ...

Heyy great job i LOVED this peom ! But i would make one small change. ON the line "made it bleed out, deeper" i would just put an elipsis where ...

OMFG YESS YOU SHOULD KEEP WRITING!!! very very very good. the only thing i would change is i would put an elipsis after the word Tears ( both times so ...

sorry i was in a rush im gonna fix it lol , it should say soul not should

WOW! That was great. Umm i didnt see any gramatical errors so ur doing good with that, and i liked the way the lines rhyme, it makes it a little ...

Thanks a bunch guys (: im going to be posting a new one that i wrote last night call The Eyes of an Angel, please chack it out (:

OMG thanks a BUNCH!!! Holds was just a typo but ill make sure to fix up the other stuff!!1 ive been on sooo many diferent websites to get people to ...

For far too many times I'm tired Fail and Fail denied of pride door after door searching to find, something of meaning, one of a kind. The mistakes remain real ...

Heyy loved the poem the theme was a big eye opener to me casue my girl friend and i both have blue eyes which made it appela to me more. ...