dante93

Also thank you both for your comments they really help.

You certainly did do a good job here. I do not know if you meant to play on the abstract idea of poetry, but if you were you pulled it ...

This poem is great. The content is wonderful, and the meaning can have so many interpretations. However there are some structural problems, that is in flow. But these are not ...

I agree completely with these tips. They are very useful. Sometimes we as readers forget the content of the writing because we are hung on punctuation. Though punctuation is key ...

Overall I liked the poem, but the other comments are right. Your first stanza is a bit choppy, but the overall message is great. It invokes what we as human ...

It reminds me of Robert Frost, one of the greatest poets to have ever lived. His poems were deceptively short, but when looked at close, has mountains, upon mountains of ...

I would not change much in this poem. It made me feel at peace, like several poems I have written about the sea, about my own personal paradise. It may ...

Well I like this poem. It is both deep and hilarious. Keep up the good work

Those breaks were intentional. And as for the first stanza you are supposed to read ti with the title. Like Tire of, together.

look at the end of the first stanza. walls growing weaker would indicate you are getting stronger. make it the walls grew larger, grasping me tighter. or something along that ...

Listen to the previous post if you wish to pursue this type writing, other wise you will not be able to adequately write a love poem. I have written many ...

I agree, a bit too many words. Its good though, overall. follow the previous comment's example.

quite plainly I agree with the first post. This is repetitive, and needs a lot more work. It is a good idea, but you need to lengthen the poem, and ...

I liked it, but to some it might be construed as superficial, only doing that to get attention. But i guess thats only an artificial message. It was very good ...

It was decent, but some points didn't sit right. Kind of vague, but I like that. It gives one room to think more. Keep writing in this style.