dante93

A word of wisdom can save us from this wasteland where ignorance roams free. Its power can end the nightmare of famine. A clear mind could solve every problem we ...

A fire rising. A new order sought. Their minds lost, overrun with desires. Their war is but one of lust. And hatred for our kind. Intellect is their enemy and ...

Yes though a grizzly image sounds awesome!

I don't really care if it's dull to you Navita. Seriously if you take the time to write such a long comment to insult me then I must be doing ...

I liked the poem. It wasn't so much depressing as it was real. Keep this kind of style and it will take you far.

No it is bear as in i give you my soul in its entirety. I give you a glimpse into my mind. That sort of stuff.

Thanks for the comments. This actually for a three part series I wrote. I forgot to mention that in my entry. This is the first of three poems i wrote ...

I bleed my thoughts onto these lines. My heart into these words. My life has plunged into the darkest depths of the abyss. My heart no longer knows true happiness. ...

thanks i guess. this was supposed to be a flat poem by the way. i got tired of writing stories within my poems and wanted to write one driven simply ...

I understand what you try to do with this poem, but it really is not that good to be honest. I'm not saying that idea is not solid, but the ...

It kind of leaves a bitter taste in my mouth. I get what you are trying to do, but the arrangement is off. Many of the lines are jumbled, and ...

A Hatred, a burning. causing an existence in shadows. This vessel has nothing left. This body empty. Void of all human emotion. What is left in this life? What lies ...

thanks. i dug this out of my folder. i wrote it about 3 months ago for no particular there ya go ill fix it sooner or later.

My heart, my my dying heart. Once a center for happiness, once flowing with good Now only a shell of what it once was. Torn was this heart from my ...

Yes, but do not sacrifice what you already have to shorten. I like the message in this poem.