dante93

I like the poem, but the stanzas are a bit hard to focus on.I would suggest making the long lines a bit shorter. It would create a few more stanzas, ...

thanks everyone. i will take that into consideration and see about revising the top soon.

Some of the greatest poetry ever written have had rhymed then stanzas with no rhyme, first. The poem itself was good, not one of the greatest, but good. I agree ...

Thanks to both of you. I have never been big on rhyming in my own work. I just write what makes sense. Again than you for your comments.

I intended to make this poem have a broken feeling, because a fate worse than death is being broken, and cursed to live an eternity with that feeling.

his reminds me of so many ancient poets, who's words were simply put, an easy to read, but suggested something more. Of course their works were much longer, but i ...

I love this poem. It is vengeful, yet it has a sad tone to me. I think this rivals some of the better poems that I have written, well done.

A line so fine, an ice so thin What is murder? To me a sin, but to you an escape. Explain your reality. You can kill without remorse but my ...

thanks. bit the poem has to have a serious tone throughout, and if not the full impact is not felt. Thanks for your comment, I appreciate it. Also these cannot ...

thank you again. that is exactly it. I still have to find the other two poems tow put with this one. I would like to clarify, any perceived eradic shift ...

Thanks to both of you for commenting. I was referencing the character, and this was a jumbled poem I was trying. I keep trying to use different styles and so ...

Ha the sad thing is this is not a "start" This was written on a whim,and I think it is good. i guess it does not really matter to you ...

A Lie I Did Not Choose Burning so deep inside me, My core branded by this madness, This mark that consumes everything I am. The Beast rages with anger, Tearing ...

thank you again.

Thanks for the comment. I try to keep some line between utter torture and the light. I have to write something not so dark every once in a while or ...