danipower0204

Damn, this was a good piece. I was just about to click "back", but then it dawned on me. This was a very good piece, well done and continue writing ...

Hello you, Yes you. How are you? Doing well? Here's a ticket Down to hell. For if you read on, I shall warn, You'll sin yourself, And die forlorn. You're ...

So, this is a dark poem, yes, but give it a shot if you dare. Look at her so pretty, dangling from the ceiling, I just couldn't help it, couldn't ...

Nice. I like it. It's simple and beautiful. However a rhyme feels a little forced. Specifically: weary and drear feels a little forced to me. Other than that, I like ...

Dear Dad, Remember the days when we had that house, At that lonely, silent road, On the other side there slept three pools, Two for grown ups at the top, ...

From the words of a monster I hate you, From the eyes of a winner who makes it through. I don't get this line. From the person you love I ...

This was quite a funny piece. I enjoyed it for what it was, which was a light-hearted, comedic piece of poetry. I think this would make a great children's piece ...

OK, so I don't really know the story between the two, but I can comment on your imagery and poem. Not much to be said, you painted a wonderful picture. ...

So I really liked this. I really did. You could possibly add a little imagery, but you already have some nice ones there. I especially like "snap some sense into ...

Wow, this totally applies to my life right now. Have you read my feelings? My thoughts? This is crazy. I am also stuck in this situation. Wow... Anyway on to ...

Ok this has huuuge potential. Really. All you need to do with this is flip it, and with that I mean use some literary devices. Instead of telling us that ...

Holy damn I love your poetry. I swear, you're only 16 and write stuff like this? Incredible.'I wish I had the skills you have. Keep on writing, I'll be reading ...

Closed doors , Hidden tears . Music loud drown out The fear. That never goes, Only grows. Music louder Beatin’ drum Takes away The feeling from. From what? You suddenly ...

There's an on-going struggle Between my body and my mind, My body function s like most others, But my mind is of its own rare kind. My body needs to ...

Alright, so I'm tired right now, but I'll do my best! This deserves a review. You are telling us way too much. It was an easy read, but it was ...