danipower0204

Thanks for the reply!!!

Hey everyone. This is chapter 1 of a story that I am working on. Please tell me what you think. A lot of names are mentioned and not expanded on ...

I found your prologue to be very enticing indeed. And that's saying something. It takes quite a bit for me to keep reading something (easily distracted?), but it was nice ...

I disagree. It may be a long chapter. But a long chapter for what? A short story? Then yes. A book? Then no. Book chapters are anywhere from 2-50 pages ...