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I'm a bit surprised that this was supposedly written by an 18 year old when the whole lyric comes off being so juvenile and lame. I'm sorry for being so ...

Shadows stained on the wall But who ever remembers them all? So many lives now gone Inflicting pain more deeper and strong Hey soul, let go My soul, just go ...

This was a pretty well written lyric for a first time lyric. There also is not a "rule of thumb" when it comes to writing a lyric or chorus. I ...

It was okay, I didn't care much for the parts in which you'd say "For losing you" it just didn't seem proper to use "for" when you could have used ...

wow I can't believe I'm the only one who didn't like this. I understand because your a teen and all that you felt that a song lyric like this would ...

This is the chorus and it stays the same: Oh Life makes me feel as high as the stars Then life brings me down like a meteor Yes, life makes ...

This was a time away From my own self-pitiful place She was my find today From afar of mind numbing space And I slept right next to her I didn’t ...

I agree with this person...."This is great Jashy, I really enjoyed it. Your lines were meaningfull. My favourite was the video thingy. Now I want to know who is who. ...

I will agree with whoever said this...."lyric poetry indeed. I like it, many have been through that dreaded stage when we feel rejected for the wrong we did. It is ...

I agree with whoever said this... "The lyrics should be more descriptive, but very strong simplicity "I wanna curl up like a cat around you and just hold you tight" ...

Interesting topic. I liked the lyric and I really couldn't see anything to correct. Keep up the good work.

Hard to believe that a 20 year old has so much improper grammer. What the hell is up with the website at the end of it?

why do people copy and paste the whole poem in their comments that they are making to the individual who wrote the poem. If they are doing that to increase ...

I didn't care too much for this. The singing was too boring as well. Try harder next time

It's referring to someone who has a criminal history and in this case someone who has a criminal history because of a sexual crime