creativemuse1

Is there any history involved in this story? This should be in the Fantasy Section. I see that you just recently joined the site, Welcome. This has some potential but ...

He knew time, he felt time for eighty seven years he felt time. He felt it wear upon him like no other abrasive. Abrasion His bones hurt, his heart barely ...

I like what the user above have said. The older man had a tall and filled-out figure. Not a hefty one, but one with meat on the bones. His face ...

This story is okay but it could be better. For one, you do not describe the surroundsing. You tell not show us, the readers, what is going on and how ...

Okay this is pretty good but you could make it better. First off, put more details and descriptions in the story. I feel like you are telling us, the readers, ...

A flower without light is doomed to die. Only your letters gave me the light I needed, but my eyes are so blurred I can no longer read them. I ...

This was pretty good. There are a few mistakes. 1) You switched from I and her to I and you. At one time, at a certain place, I fell in ...

I beg to differ. This is a good story. I like how the details are. I like the feelings in this. But you mentioned that this was from a scene ...

I will say I am so happy some one wrote a zombie story. I don't see a lot of those around here. Okay, here's my review. Since this is written ...

Ziggy made some good points. I was wondering about the girl's age. I pictured a young girl and I was thinking why is she not afraid of the dark? The ...

Well, I notice you made a lot of grammer mistakes. I mean a lot. This is a good start though. I like how this is going. I noticed you changed ...

I think this is so good. It is really good. Against anger.Against hatred.Against fear.Against violence.Against the perverse.Against that which no god can conjur.Against that which is never truly defea

Well, first, It seems you just recently joined yws. So I would like to say welcome. Second, this is a really good story. I like your style of writing. This ...

Well, first, I want to say that was a nice story. Yes racism is bad. It is worse than bad, it is horridous. Like what Justtrying said you have grammer ...

Okay, first off, I thought the dude was bent on destroying New York City until I read the end which surprised me. I think you need more details. Show people ...