creativemuse1

I like your poem. I agree with Sassykat, it needs more details. I, also, feel it repeats too much. "I wish I could tell myself" and etc. But that is ...

Colorful veils Jeweled hip scarves Shimmying to the beat of the drum Swaying to the rhythm of the arabian music Hands and arms making waves Temptation A smile across her ...

That was really good. It kept me interested. I really like this story. Sad at the end but good.

It is really good. But I agree Jenthura, it's too big to see.

I think this is a very good poem. What you wrote is very true and real. Very good poem.

This is really good. I understand how you feel and what you are saying in your poem. You are trying to give people a message saying to them. Hatred, stereotyping ...

Sometimes I feel invisible yet I am standing in the middle of the crowd I can speak but I don't have a voice I can sleep but I don't have ...

This is really good. You have some emotions in this poem. I like how the emotions show up in the poem especially at the end.

Awww. I know exactly what you are feeling. I really like this poem. It is soft and you tell the readers what you did and how you feel.

Ha, I got it.

CookieDough

I really like this story. I can't wait to read part 2. I like the emotions in it.

I love this poem. It is so funny yet so true.

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