creativemuse1

This is a really good poem. I gag, "love, kiss, touch"to your earrings, your ears are reserved for needles skipping heartbeats on 45s. I just didn't quite understand this part.

His father had forgotten and his mother…well, she hadn’t been alive since he was born. A good story. But what does his father forget?

We all make grammer mistakes, including I. :D

I think this story is a good start. You need to fix the grammer in the story. "Yeah." I held her waist gently as she stood up grasping her ribs. ...

Oh, I forget to ask. When Sam died, I died with her too. Part of me felt torn, like a knife had been punched into my stomach, twisted. I never ...

Wow, that is a good story. So much emotions. I listened intently as boots clumped along the polished floor, and a soft wumph, as the seat beside my bed was ...

Well, first off, the ending was so surprising. I was shocked. “Well,” said the seventeen year old drug dealer. “I guess you could pay me that way. I haven’t had ...

Calvin Evergreen entered the deli, a daily tradition he seldom broke, in the morning for a cup of hot Frappachino coffee with a side dish of blueberry bagels. The owner, ...

This is a good poem. I like it. [quote="ratularay"] I planned the best dress to put; (Do you mean put on?) But too small for my size it had grown. ...

Just to say, like DakotaK pointed out, the first part was confusing. I think it is good.

you said you care/cared but, just ignored me, you said you loved/love me but you cheated, In my opinion, it doesn't seem right. I think you should put Cared and ...

I like this poem. It is really good and I agree with the grades part. Just saying. Anyway, good job.

This is a good poem. I like the ending. You showed emotions through your poem.

This is a good poem. I can read the emotions in it.

This is a good poem. I'm so sorry about your situation. That's sad. But I hope you are better now. Anyways, nice poem. I can read the emotions in it.