cookEmonster

Prologue My eyes widened as he yanked a familiar knife from his leather boot. A murderous look came across his face. I gasped at the sight of it, terror filling ...

Oh my goodness, this is really good. It was a little confusing at first though. I'm not sure if you want critism on it since it was a school project ...

Wow. This story is amazing! It captures all your mind into it and lets you imagine all the details. I love your style of writing(: Keep up the great work! ...

I felt my eyes bulge out of my head and my mouth drop open in total shock. "Wh-What?!" I stuttered. She sighed and looked at me expectantly. Ok, so let ...

Ok. So, I caught a lot of mistakes. Like the other reviewers said, its pretty crucial to add paragraphs and spacings. The readers see it and their eyes already glaze ...

Chapter 1 Chapter 11 Something fuzzy tickled my face, disturbing me from a dreamless sleep. I groaned and rolled over, already beginning to fall back asleep. About 2 seconds later, ...

Oh wow! I like your photography skills (: Its cool how you made simple everyday things like bubbles and that building turn into beautiful things all captured into one simple ...

This is amazing. I really like how you explained the depths of their feelings. It really made me feel connected to the story. (: Great job! -CookEmonster

Ooh I really like this. I thought it wouldn't have interested me and captured my attention to it that much since it was a short piece but.. Wow! I'm looking ...

Aw, I really like this story. It's really cute. (: BUT, I do have some things to comment on, hahah. Is there a way to add indents? If you're on ...

This is really good! But maybe add some more emotion to your writing? Like was fear gripping his heart or something like that. I didn't read the other comments so ...

Part One The Contest Page Link Once more, I was in for the shock of my life. Instead of just marrying some man with royalty in his blood, I was ...

Part Two The Contest Page Link Ever since I was a toddler, I had the power to communicate with animals. My mother and papa told me it wasn't fit to ...

Wow. This is amazing. It made me feel so hollow inside just reading it. It made me want to curl up in my bed like she did and sob all ...

Ooh. This is pretty different from things I normally read, but I like it! :) I think I'll leave the criticsm up to other readers. Hahah Well, cant wait to ...