convintojm

i like it. i guess mostly because like any writer i've felt that. and i like how you decided on a short format because there isn't a lot that needs ...

i think the revision was an improvement but i guess this very inexpereinced feel off your work which is perfectly ok if you're new. i knew it took me months ...

my biggest problem is the flow. it's just too sort of bouncy and light. i felt it should come off more somber.

there just didn't seem to be enough of a point. no real substance to it. just like a simple and possibly cliche description. so i guess any judgement would be ...

i thought it was interesting but i didn't completely understand the ending.

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i like it. the tone and the idea. though i noticed you used two different ways to describe the second blue and only one way to describe the first. that ...

i find the tone very enchanting. one sort of minor silly thing though. Adonis just seemed too cliche for the rest of the poem which is very orginal and fresh ...

i like how the first few lines set you up to think it's something very simple and light but then you reveal a deeper thought. though i'm not sure i ...

it's pretty good. i like how you add little details that make the poem more real. i do agree about the transition though it does seem a little off but ...