convintojm

There’s nothing like a slow smile spreading across full pink lips when you’re too close for this summer heat, but every breath means the rise of her chest will brush ...

i think it'll work best along side the picture but it does a really godo job of painting a picture by itself. one thing though... "i wonder of they weep" ...

it's straightfoward and a bit too sweet. i can't say what to improve because it's just i'm not really digging it and i have a hard time making suggestions for ...

seemed too straightfoward and very very predictable

nice and rather light which is a bit uncommon from you but good none the less.

it didn't keep my attention very well. it has the potential to be really interactive and like toy with the reader but it doesn't really.

it wasn't bad considering the restrictions placed on it but the flow was interrupted by the form

absolutely beautiful. the flow of words and their very sound (i felt complelled to read it aloud) are a pleasure.

it's interesting and i like the idea but it didn't really capture me. the tone as lovely but because it's so general it seems too light.

Visions on Soft Grass The shadows of dusk lean heavy on the evening sky as I fall to soft grass. My mind plays a smooth jazz tune painting for me ...

there's defintly some really good lines in there. overall i don't really know how i feel on it but parts of it really strike me. as for what you're getting ...

i really like it, the idea and the execution. though i'm not sure about etch in the fourth stanza because to me etching implies actually leaving an indent in the ...

I really like the line "Am I that forgettable." but overall it was very general and it didn't seem to evoke much in me.

While the emotions are strong it feels like it's just talking or rambling and not like an actual coherent poem, bascially it still feels rough and raw.

it seems like it would work much better as a story cause it doesn't feels like a poem. i think any other suggestions i might have have been said so ...