convintojm

the beginning isn't as strong or interesting as possible but i too really like the ending. murdered by cliches was one of my favorite lines.

it sounds simply like a short description of a headache or the like but it doesn't seem to hold anything deeper and so leaves the reader going, yeah and what's ...

my thought behind that captalization is because it's a name of the flower. so i figured it would be more obvious it's a specific thing as opposed to some kinda ...

Curled on a garden chair overlooking Morning Glories shriveled by an overcast dusk thinking of a boy who belongs to her past and the small back corner of her heart. ...

the ending is really good (with the ball) but the rest seemed just ok. i'd like to see it with some of niteowl's suggestions.

seems too much like an unedited journal entry and that's not working for me. plus there's almost too many specifics that it's hard to connect to. it's interesting though and ...

starts off pretty good. but it just gets too blah and predictible. makes you sound immature.

like them all. the first one is definitly my favorite though. a lot of nice images in the last one but the first two lines are too right to the ...

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it felt bumpy and inconsistent. the patterned stuructured first stanza followed by less structured other stanzas bothered me.

way too short and way too simple. i don't even think i can get a feel for the poem to tell if it has potential from that. needs some serious ...

ok went back and added commas where i would intend for a pause. i do understand the need for them but i'm horrible at ever remembering to use punctuation. so ...

beautiful to read but one thing that bothered me was "black as the air at night" i didn't really like the wording or even the metaphor itself.

The touch of your hand holds my mind in place has we float above the ground, i think you mean as not has it was ok overall. there was too ...

interesting but vague maybe too vague