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interesting prologue. i'm drawn in now.(:

so... are they all vampires? i'm aware of the main character and i'm guessing her love-interest are, but what about the rest? you should identify, i guess, signs or hints ...

my love to you sings grab me by my hand, darling keep me from falling

wow, you have talent. first time i saw this and i'm still gawking about how cool it looks. my drawings consists of stick figures and all, haha. but seriously back ...

i liked this a lot. try spacing out and making lines, instead of having one big chunky paragraph. some readers say that draws them away from a poem or story. ...

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i actually liked that it was long. i liked the personalities of the characters(:

i thought that this is wonderful. truly, one of the best i have ever read.