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Re: because we can- (UR)
hello, esther! to tell you the truth, i was wondering if i did italicize a lot, and i wasn't sure. glad someone pointed it out for me, because i probably ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: because we can- (UR)
Going Under Major Reconstruction
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: Blue Princess#1
1. I opened my eyes then closed and the n again as the sunlight blinded me from my open window. i thought adding the word and made it flow better. ...
Apr 8, 2010 -
Re: Blue Princess, Prologue
hey, there, pawprint. i thought that this was piece was pretty good and straight to the point, but i've noticed a few things within this work: 1. Someone surely must ...
Apr 8, 2010 -
Re: Taste Of My Enemy. Chapter Three.
woo, chapter three! wow, she's dreaming about him. hmm. i liked this chapter, a lot, and i'm glad that you updated! i keep wondering if that girl he was kissing ...
Apr 8, 2010 -
Re: Hands
hello! i'll start off by saying: i love your writing style. the beginning was great with the whole hands thing. it drew me in, and i was caught. i only ...
Apr 8, 2010 -
Re: The Greatest Matchmaking Challenge Ever: Ch. 2
hello, hello! so, you've posted another chapter, i'm glad. like zib said, there's not a lot of action in this, but the dialogue was good. so, anita's introduced! i'm guessing ...
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: its alive
irascible small energetic hand hissing dolls dwindle childless
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: it is surely expected
determined to find the real truth behind it all havoc will ensue
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: Sun Kissed
cute. it was cute how they would sneak to see each other. kinda reminds me of a certain, well-known Shakespearean play. but it's still okay. i like the background you ...
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: one hundred and two shades of green 1.1
thanks nyiiri. and thanks lovexpeacexrandomx3 for the pointing out, i'll be sure to revise. (:
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: New Story hope you like "you're not cute when you cry"
"Elena come down stairs it's time for dinner!" yeah, like wildest temptations said, add a comma after Elena. oh, and i'd try and split it into two sentences. *"Elena, come ...
Apr 6, 2010 -
Re: Whispers From The Grave
hello, there! i feel bad for her, and i agree with some of the other reviewers. the suspense was great, and your story drew me in until the very end. ...
Apr 6, 2010 -
Re: Anna and Ryan- their story
this was cute. descriptions are necessary. i feel as if you didn't describe enough, and it was going a bit too fast. i didn't like how parts of their lives ...
Apr 6, 2010 -
Re: Taste Of My Enemy. Chapter Two.
naughty, naughty kayla for having those kinds of dreams. and i can't help but guess who plays the role of he in it! wow, i love these types of stories. ...
Apr 6, 2010