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  • Lyric Poetry Re: still life

    thank you so much for your critique; it is very helpful.

    Dec 14, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: still life

    :) thank you very much for your words. though i don't quite understand what you mean by "though I see a gap in between the description of the focus as ...

    Dec 14, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: still life

    you keep throwing me off the edge of the galaxy with broken arms and tattered sleeves that with the wind confine and bind me to your statue; a scuplture of ...

    Dec 14, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: hold your fire, heavens

    thank you so much :)

    Dec 14, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: hold your fire, heavens

    the night is beautiful when it's cold out. my eyes are lost in the fourteen karat stars shimmering and twisting into words i can't escape - we're blanketed by this ...

    Dec 13, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Young Captive, Dearest Friend

    This is beautiful and something so many people can relate with. The only thing I could mention would be the use of "dark" twice. A different adjective would make it ...

    Dec 13, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Be Not My World

    I also disliked the use of thy. However, the rest of it was incredible -- I really loved reading it. "Be not my world, where specks of white on thy ...

    Dec 13, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: My Dream

    This made me smile so much! It's something that would be perfect for a greeting card. It was so simple but so meaningful, great work.

    Dec 13, 2009


A big mountain of sugar is too much for one man. I can see now why God portions it out in those little packets.
— Homer Simpson