collin

Thank you for taking a look at this. You don't have to read all of it, just as much of it as you want. There's one thing in particular, in ...

why are youput apostrophes in random places? "You did not ca'ch me!"...?????? When I read this I thought you wanted me to pause at the apostrophe. It doesn't really make ...

Jeremiah stood, staring out the window before him. It was not a pleasant sight to see through the open space, but then again, was Jerusalem a pleasant place to see ...

If you go to Orson Scott's website, there's writing lessons from the author of this book. He even talks about writing Ender's Game. The lessons are really constructive and they're ...

You don't have to read it all, just comment on what you do read. Thanks, I appreciate all of your help. CHAPTER 1: A Small Hope Jeremiah stood, staring out ...

I thought it was pretty good. You just need to add a couple of spaces between words there towards the beginning, two instances I think. And is this a sequil? ...

Grammatical errors make people stop reading posts and sigh. Proofread your work several times before posting it for the public's eye. from the first little bit: "Two months—it’s been two ...

I really only have one thing to comment on, other than that one typo sentence towards the beginning. Could you describe this creature a little more? I had trouble figuring ...

Jeremiah stood, staring out the window before him. It was not a pleasant sight to see through the open space, but then again, was Jerusalem a pleasant place to see ...