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sorry, just cant write anymore.

what was your inspiration?

I enjoyed this, even if it was sad. I agree with Kate that you should make the chapters longer, but being that these are just opening statements maybe they're right ...

There is such a thing called constructive critisism and it's usually thought as a good thing. You can span things out longer... How does she feel about pregnancy? Why is ...

I loved this, and im REALLY curious. i see that you posted it in April are you going to continue it? Please do!

this interests me. I wish you had added more.. However it leaves one to think up their own conclusions. Was this just a quick thought that you had to get ...

These are very well taken. The clarity is perfect. The first and the third are amazing. The first is so original, whimsical. The background is very balanced and makes the ...

wow, this wants to make me punch my hypocritical coward even more!! I could just be predjudiced because i can relate to this topic, but I think this piece was ...

This is very good. You could look up a keyword in a thesaurus and pick the oddest or most genuine version of that word that you can find,.... That's what ...

I was bored.. Be cruel. ~~~~~ I can't see you. You're like a vaporous substance that clings in mid-air beside me. Your intangibility grows less and less, more and more ...

Sorry, I'm not usually that harsh. I most commonly focus on the story line. This is pretty interesting. Confusing. Although at a start of a story it can be affective ...

I liked this. And I'd like very much for you to write it as a scenario. However, I liked that the reader could guess what was going on without specifically ...

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I thought this piece was good. You might want to try adding more wordy details though. Unnecessary details are usually necessary. Also it might be a good idea to look ...