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can;t figure it out, sorry. I'm confused. Oh and b y the way it sorta turns people away when it's confusing and you say, "figure it out for yourself." =/ ...

Uhhm... I don't know...... Since you already had a grammatical crit I'll skip it.... but it does distract from the story. This was decent.... to tell ou the truth I ...

Thank you. :wink:

Don't explain anything. It's perfect. Besideds the errors. But I think you did a wonderful job conveying your point. Awesomeness for your first try!!! Very well done.

That was lovely. Here's an in detail critique, in case you want to improve. "Did you ever know that there was a journey to Forever? --was could be IS. That ...

JOCELYN!!!! you need to use this as your writing against Ty. clean it up a lil, revise it and this could be AMAZINGG!!!! I honestly think this is probably one ...

That was EXTREEMLY confusing. Sorry. I'm lost. I'm sure if I could understand it I would totally love it.

That was good! It was humerous and very light. A great think to perk up my day. =) Bravo. There were a few grammatical errors tha I'm sure you could ...

This wasn't a very strong poem. it expresses feeling, but i think you could add a lot more. i would say really add a lot more emotion and this could ...

That was good. I think that it explains how a lot of people feel. If you're feeling this I'm really sorry for you. But back to the poem.... She cry’s…. ...

Eagle's View I look down, eagle's view. Cotton balls, white as chalk Solid as anything. Can't see through them, hard as I try. Everything minuscule as if It had no ...

very good poem. very well done and i think you captured the picture perfectly. and i do not think its right to judge a poem on what its about. just ...

"For I am the way, the truth, and the life, no one can come to the Father except through me." If you believe in the bible, it shows that really, ...

this is my favorite peice of mine. tied with a close second of lost in death. those are about the only two dark peices ive ever written. and i like ...

um.. no. thats sorta a given.