clive1

I can't believe you write so well for an 8 year old. Do try to put speech on a new line when a new person speaks.

Really well done - I like it!

Very very well done for an 8 year old. Can I suggest that you add some detail to the death of Mr Murdstone - why, for example, did he die ...

Very very well done for an 8 year old. Can I suggest that you add some detail to the death of Mr Murdstone - why, for example, did he die ...

Overall, this has the best spelling, grammar and puctuation I have yet seen on YWS. Well done! Only two negative things for me. 'The first was the use of 'anytime ...

My 8 year old daughter loves this website and is inspired by it. She has had some kind and helpful reviews and has used the suggestions therein in this, the ...

For me what makes a great poem is not whether it scans well, has rhymes or conforms to the rules of poetry, but whether the writer's heart was aflame when ...

My eight year old says this. Great story. Especially for a six year - old.

I think some of my comments will echo others but here are my main thoughts. I think it is really important to get all the normal rules of grammar and ...

This was written by my 8 year old Plunge I plunged into the ocean for the very first time. My mum and dad named me Courtney because of my dead ...

My 8 year old says this. I liked the dragon in the story. Marie's and the dragon's description was fabulous. When you used the word 'barred' do you really mean ...

Really very good - intriguing, suspenseful and gripping. Really! A few small comments. There are a number of small typos - for example 'I looked me right in the eyes'. ...

The stench of its mass was unbearable The use of the word 'mass' doesn't really work for me - how about 'body'? Also, I found the repetition of the theme ...

This story was written unaided by my 8 year old GHOSTS IN HUNTING By Lottie I went to an ordinary school in Shortlands. My sister, Sophia went to a school ...

A great effort at 'olde englishe' to give the story a particular feel. However, quite often the wrong 'olde' word has been used. Also,it would be more attractive to read ...